Re: NYS seeks to criminalize reptile ownership
I think it's a really solid start.
The things I would remove from it are the jabs at the lawmakers. They aren't going to be happy with some of the language used. Those kinds of things won't help the matters. Just needs to be kept professional and said in person.
Paperwork says nothing to these people. They simply laugh or take a cursory look and toss it in the garbage. In person is what it's about.
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